Love Letter help plz... (20)

1 Name: Secret Admirer : 2008-02-19 12:31 ID:+qnr5cR4

well i suck at english and i wanted the letter to be perfect so help out with grammar and some comment plz.

Dear [Her Name],

I once swore that I would live the rest of my life as a free man because I have felt the pain of heartbreak before and I never want to relive that experience again and yet my will is no match for your charms. Your elegance, wit, beauty have smitten me and saved me from the pit of cynicism.

You are always precious to me as a friend and I don’t really remember when I started to want you as something more. All I know is now a week without seeing you feels like an eternity to me and the thought of you leaving torn me up inside. Though I still have many doubts about starting a relationship but I believe that one must face his fear and take chances when presented with an opportunity for something wonderful to happen. So by your permission I would like the chance to get to know you better, take you out on a date, take a step further then friendship and see where fate leads us.

Your Secret Admirer,

 [My Name]
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