can i get some advice? (17)

1 Name: lovechan : 2008-08-26 05:41 ID:Xrk/sNMm

i'm real young, like 15 years. so my lyrics will probably suck. ass. i'm new to this so idk about bridges and shit.
well i know what they are i just don't know how to use them myself.
but still i'd like some opinions xP it's really short. any suggestions?

i imagine it to be like...hiphop rnb...

thinking back, maybe
i should've known from the start
about the games you'd be playing
that would damage my heart
you never knew baby
how i felt about you
and honestly i already knew
you'd fall out soon too
and now we're sitting here
still discussin the matter at hand
i know i told you once but imma tell you again

(chorus)
you got what i need
i hope you see i do.
and i think you'd need me too
oh baby please
keep your excuse
how would you feel if you
were the one just being used
just baby please.

yes, this song is just for you
nobody else baby
it's all about you
you're my main squeeze
and my mvp
you made me feel cooler
and refreshed like burts bees

love, don't forget the situation at hand
a relationship takes work
there's a lot in command

7 Post deleted.

8 Post deleted.

9 Post deleted.

10 Post deleted.

Name: Link:
Leave these fields empty (spam trap):
More options...
Verification: