[CREATIVITY] Let's write a poem [POETRY] (56)

1 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 06:29

Prime numbers through >>40 hand-picked by >>42 are opening verses.
Odd numbers write the second part (>>3-41).
Even numbers write the third (>>2-40).
Multiples of five up through >>40 write fourth part.
>>43 is the author and >>44 titles the poem.
It is >>45's solemn responsibility to publish it.

2 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 06:30

fucking garbage

3 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 06:33

Whereupon ruminating waters there oft reclin'd a young boy

4 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 06:35

The world of memories we see is ghosts trapped in the flesh

5 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 14:14

Like a mitten blown away by the wind

6 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 20:39

Soggy noodles taste like a spittle

7 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 21:02

But it turned out that she had a penis

8 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 21:22

Standing in this puddle of piddle

9 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 21:27

The world spins faster once we've all lain down to die

10 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 22:45

Dozing for millennia, a brazen bolt of mittens arcs with regal restitution

11 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6720 23:58

The world in her eyes, so blue and wet

12 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6721 07:56

Some minutes seem longer than others

13 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6721 08:13

The eyes in her wet, so worldly and blue

14 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6721 14:21

I spend them, mostly, under the covers

15 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6721 17:01

I want to be a computer!

16 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6721 18:12

aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAああああああああああああ

17 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6721 19:02

D.Q.N. was him!?

18 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6721 20:11

Forever burnt into my retinas

19 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6722 02:19

I scaled the seas in search of some sordid secret

20 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6722 14:45

He thrusts his mitts against her bust

21 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6722 15:07

A thousand lines were drawn in the sand

22 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6724 18:39

Beneath the lunar orb, together with a young girl

23 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6725 00:12

I can't wait to bomb some dodongoes

24 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6725 00:33

A secret in a bottle of marmalade

25 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6725 12:23

Unknowing of the inherent inferiority of gloves

26 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6729 23:52

The mind silenced, the body speaks: and quite loudly

27 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6730 19:51

Alas, cruel fate!

28 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6730 21:14

Window degree wife

29 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6730 21:38

Extreme prejudice in all dimensions; thoughtful: shameful? Powerful

30 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6730 22:12

Till death do us part

31 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6730 22:59

Twisting, tearing, writhing, screaming .

32 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6730 23:01

Healing, uniting, calming, silently

33 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6731 11:27

So soft, so delicate - but no longer!

34 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6739 01:12

ＤＥＡＴＨ！

35 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6739 01:24

Glistening, warm, dripping and long.

36 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6739 16:51

Her tender lips parted and those familiar words came out:

37 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6739 17:01

'Silent as the sea siphoning seals, splendid as the surf, surely you are joking, my dear professor, sir?'

38 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6740 14:31

Life! Prosperity! Wealth!

39 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6740 16:08

And so it goes

40 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6740 18:54

Yesterday and today and tomorrow as well

41 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6741 00:27

Moloch who entered my soul early! Moloch in whom I am a consciousness without a body! Moloch who frightened me out of my natural ecstasy! Moloch whom I abandon! Wake up in Moloch! Light streaming out of the sky!

42 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6755 19:14

I can't believe this thread fell off the front page just as we finished each line! How could such a thing happen?

Anyway, I suppose that I "hand pick":
>>2,3,5,7,11,13,17,19,23,29,31,37,41
Although I can't help but feel it would be better to just split it into stanzas of four lines each. It would be much simpler and involve less repetition. I propose that >>45 has the final say on the format of the poem.

43 Name: Bun von Bunnington : 1993-09-6755 22:47

~ by Bun von Bunnington ~

44 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6756 01:02

The poem shall be called "It's Crowded On The Balcony" and >>45 should format the poem as dearest >>1 set out when he created this thread.

45 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6757 08:32

>>42,44
I believe a compromise is in order, hmmyes?

First stanza: prime numbers
>>2,3,7,11,13,17,19,23

Second stanza: odd numbers
>>21,27,29,31,33,37,39,41

Third stanza: even numbers
>>22,24,26,28,32,34,36,38

Fourth stanza: multiples of five
>>5,10,15,20,25,30,35,40

Fifth stanza: the rest
>>4,6,8,9,12,14,16,18

And now I'm off to the publisher's office.

46 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6757 10:18

>>45 I think >>1 meant you were supposed to put the actual poem up in its final form

i'll do it later on when i have time unless someone else does it first

47 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6757 10:46

>>46
fucking garbage
Whereupon ruminating waters there oft reclin'd a young boy
But it turned out that she had a penis
The world in her eyes, so blue and wet
The eyes in her wet, so worldly and blue
D.Q.N. was him!?
I scaled the seas in search of some sordid secret
I can't wait to bomb some dodongoes

A thousand lines were drawn in the sand
Alas, cruel fate!
Extreme prejudice in all dimensions; thoughtful: shameful? Powerful
Twisting, tearing, writhing, screaming .
So soft, so delicate - but no longer!
'Silent as the sea siphoning seals, splendid as the surf, surely you are joking, my dear professor, sir?'
And so it goes
Moloch who entered my soul early! Moloch in whom I am a consciousness without a body! Moloch who frightened me out of my natural ecstasy! Moloch whom I abandon! Wake up in Moloch! Light streaming out of the sky!

Beneath the lunar orb, together with a young girl
A secret in a bottle of marmalade
The mind silenced, the body speaks: and quite loudly
Window degree wife
Healing, uniting, calming, silently
ＤＥＡＴＨ！
Her tender lips parted and those familiar words came out:
Life! Prosperity! Wealth!

Like a mitten blown away by the wind
Dozing for millennia, a brazen bolt of mittens arcs with regal restitution
I want to be a computer!
He thrusts his mitts against her bust
Unknowing of the inherent inferiority of gloves
Till death do us part
Glistening, warm, dripping and long.
Yesterday and today and tomorrow as well

The world of memories we see is ghosts trapped in the flesh
Soggy noodles taste like a spittle
Standing in this puddle of piddle
The world spins faster once we've all lain down to die
Some minutes seem longer than others
I spend them, mostly, under the covers
aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAああああああああああああ
Forever burnt into my retinas

48 Name: >>45 : 1993-09-6757 21:42

Consider this poem published.
http://tanasinn.info/wiki/It%27s_Crowded_On_The_Balcony

49 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6792 21:07

And now, shockingly, I shall use this long dead thread to catalogue my own weird poetry. You're welcome to read it if you happen to come across it, but please don't bump it to the front page.

50 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6792 21:09

Vernal winds come
From a softer world
Four boundaries away
Paper flowers unfurl
Blue butterflies flutter
Atop proud cumuli
Machinations of the earth
Are no concern to the sky

ツンドラで会おう
「幽かな人」
その月の下
あなたと一緒

Spill tea on the table
In libation or despair
Hear the lamentations
How they thicken the air!
Battle the high gods!
Slash thought to shreds!
Profundity is weakness;
See - Romance is dead!

51 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6792 21:14

Beside the swell and slumber, innumerable hands
Reached out from the trees and stones
Softly, tenderly, they led me to that place
Where snowfall absolves our sinners' bones

(割と場所は空いてるわよ)
(We do have a few empty places)

Curls and coils of bonds reconciled
They asked, "Are these meritless?
Are you to say that the palace lack substance
Simply because it lacks a witness?"

(でも、あなたはお呼びではない)
(You still are not invited, dear)

Blue eyes gazed, black thoughts sank
All realms were clarified
The number of my visits is rendered finite
By this decade long suicide

(最後の詰めが肝心なのよ)
(The conclusion is the most important part)

You'll miss it when it's gone.

52 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6800 18:54

Raindrops fall onto the window pane
And through that grey coloured square
I see the bloodied living trees feign
The hue of a dead woman's hair.

Raindrops fall upon the window pane
And through their tiny lenses
I pass to a world beyond alkanes
DMT's gift made endless.

Raindrops fall against the window pane
And the glass shatters under their weight
What? Such a feat can't be accomplished by rain?
Perhaps you shall share the window's fate!

53 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6829 23:27

And we'll weep like children
(What can one do but cry?)
At that cataclysmic forecast,
Four words: The End Is Nigh!

They'll come with invitations
To the terminal soirée
I'll select my finest clothes
Then simply walk away.
Perhaps I'll run to the mountains
Expire amongst family
It's not like I can meet you
Beneath the cherry tree.

Look, here comes the end!
There's nothing more to say.
Come, laugh as the bombs fall!
They deserve it anyway!
Shout it from the rooftops!
Voice your derision!
What does it matter now?
Now all is said and done.

And we'll weep like children
(What can one do but cry?)
Shedding tears of gratitude,
We'll be alone - just you and I!

(Actually, it shall end thus:
As my time runs thin
I'll gaze into the ocean's abyss,
My cold warmth mirrored within.)

54 Name: ( ˃ ヮ˂) : 1993-09-6936 01:58

Sticks and stones won't break my bones
And nor will an armoured tank
Sharpest blades shan't break my skin
Bullets cannot pierce my flank

You can't harm me; no one can
I am the diamond man

My heart cannot be broken
Don't even bother to try
Aged rocks and withered trees
Will sooner shed tear than I

You can't touch me; no one can
I am the diamond man

Those who know me live in fear
Which is just as it should be
You are dead through the eyes of
Invulnerability

You can't stop me; no one can
I am the diamond man

Truly, my life is perfect
But I can't remember which
Flawless spheres all look alike
Anhedonia's a bitch

You can't save me; no one can
I am the diamond man

55 Name: (*ﾟーﾟ) : 1993-09-7556 01:10

Ranta tanta tan
Ran tanta ranntan
Tanta ranntan tan ranta tan
No one is here
Now I can write poetry

56 Name: (*ﾟーﾟ) : 1993-09-7804 02:41

I see you
Dancing here
Someone was watching
Now you're had

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